Recess Lettering

I feel like this just isn't there yet... So i'm hoping for some feedback from some of the awesome folks that slay lettering on here. Just to name a few that i follow and know of off the top of my head.
(If you don't follow them on here yet you should) Feel free to check out the rough pencil sketch too.

@Bob Ewing @Ryan Hamrick @Mackey Saturday @Nick Slater @friendsoftype @Claire Coullon